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When the prince sees the flower bloom from the palm of her hand, he orders her arrest.

She is only seven years old.

He takes the flower from her and keeps it, even though he knows he shouldn't. He puts it a vase, or, rather, his servant does that for him. The flower doesn't ever die, even years later.

It's dawn of a December morning, and he's cold. But still, he stands next to his father dutifully and looks at the little girl with blue eyes that are now black from seven nights sleeping on a cold, dungeon floor behind bars. They cut off her dark brown hair during that time. She's tied to the pyre, and there are seven guards around her, holding sharper swords than normal, not that she could get away. There's one man dressed in black holding an unlit torch, with a mask over his face to prevent his death. His father raises his arm, and the torch is lit.

She locks her gaze to his, and he blinks at her. It's like she expects him to prevent it. He couldn't, though, he can't. She scares him, with her magical flowers and blue eyes identical to that of his servant's. No child should be able to do such horrible things.

It suddenly occurs to him that he knows very little about his servant, and he wonders if that little girl was his servant's daughter. The idea leaves quickly. His servant has probably never even been kissed.

His father the king brings his arm down, and the torch lights the pyre, casting shadows over the courtyard and the crowd. She doesn't scream, nor try to evade the golden-red flames that lick the wood, and then her dirty old clothes, eagerly. She remains perfectly still, and it occurs to him that his mother might have taught her how to endure fire. Tears stream down her face when they nip her skin, devouring her pale white body without mercy, but her gaze holds his, strong and accusing. Smoke begins to rise, black and smelling of burning flesh and fabric. It seems to take forever, but when the flames reach her shoulders, and her eyes scream betrayal, pain, and exhaustion, he cannot bear it any longer and he looks away. She screams then, the sound loud, raw, and piercing in a way nothing else could possibly be. That lasts forever too, eventually fading. But he can still hear it, echoing loudly in his ears, ringing like the execution bells.

When he moves again, his father is gone, and the guards and the torch-holder are, too. The crowd dissipated hours ago. The December sun is just above the mountain, and the resulting rays remind him eerily of fire. He blinks.

And two white clouds become blue, and the sun's rays become fire, and he suddenly sees her eyes all over again, and he knows he will never forget it. He will never forget her screaming, or the smell of her ashes. And he will always regret not saving that little girl.  
I honestly don't know where this came from. I don't know where this is set, or who they are. All I know is: the father is the king, and the boy is the prince. The little girl is a villager. Maybe.

And, it is general fiction because it isn't quite horror, but it's almost there, I think.

EDIT: Thanks so much for the DD, all the comments, and favorites!
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Given 2014-04-17
Short, poignant, disturbing. Blue Eyes in Flames by Bluebellwriter7 ( Featured by neurotype )
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doveangel8 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is sad...
A girl condimed to die... for giving the Prince a flower.

Yet it's true that those in power hate what is different.

Hate anyone who can do something that they can't.
Even when it's a simple pretty flower
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Bluebellwriter7 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Life was brutal in the times of the witch trials, kings, and magic. I wanted to explore it a bit here.
Those in power hate what they don't understand; are afraid of it: Another concept I threw into the story.
Thanks for the comment and fav. :D
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ilyilaice Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014
The beginning pulled me in right away. It is a very strong opening sentence.

Not sure if anyone has pointed this out, but in "Smoke beings to rise," I think you meant "begins"
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Bluebellwriter7 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks, both for the compliment and for pointing out the mistake. I will fix it right away. :)
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CodyWolf Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014
Very touching. So sad but so beautiful. So well written and the detail. I'm speechless!
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Bluebellwriter7 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!
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CodyWolf Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014
Your welcome
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lesliedavenport Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014
Beautiful job.  I loved this story, although it made me sad.  Sad, not only for the girl, obviously because she lost her life; but also for the Prince, who lost his innocence when he turned his face away.  Amazing writing.  :)  Good deal.
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Bluebellwriter7 Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks so much.
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TruthDawnsinFire Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:) how old was the prince?
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Bluebellwriter7 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh. Eh, I've no idea. I figured about 19 or 20 something. Maybe.
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I wonder what would happen if he planted that flower. Wonderful little piece you've got here - it's intense, and draws from other sources without relying upon them. I like the little implications scattered around like the possible relationship between the girl and the servant; those little things flesh out a larger world in a short piece :)
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ThoTui Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
I love your idea! I think if he planted that flower, it would bear her soul, that way she would be still around and they might etablish a relationship. 
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Bluebellwriter7 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I've no idea what would happen if he planted the flower. Thank you.
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Sequel idea! :XD:
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Bluebellwriter7 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Hmm, yes, maybe. XD
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Guienvere137 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
This reminds me of Merlin. I like it! Congrats on the Daily Deviation! <3 
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Bluebellwriter7 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks. It seems to remind a lot of people of Merlin. :)
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
I’m very happy for you!!! :iconloveloveplz: :tighthug:
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Bluebellwriter7 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! :)
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MsGeekNerd Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Do you think he'll eventually throw the flower away?
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Bluebellwriter7 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't know if he will or not.
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MsGeekNerd Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't think he will... I think someone will find it or something....
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Bluebellwriter7 Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Maybe.
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MsGeekNerd Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Hm.... I liked this piece.... 
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Bluebellwriter7 Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks.
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MsGeekNerd Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
XD You're welcome 
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Lady-Weavile-461 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Nothing really to say after that... But it was well written, sad, and to the point.

An interesting take on the punishment for witchcraft during the times.  :iconthumbsupplz:
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Bluebellwriter7 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you.
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Lady-Weavile-461 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You are quite welcome :hug:
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WriterOfTheSky55 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
speechless. love it.
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Bluebellwriter7 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you.
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FalconFate Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This makes me think of BBC's Merlin…… an absolutely beautiful piece, my dear.
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Bluebellwriter7 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks.
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FalconFate Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome! Oh, and I almost forgot, congrats on the DD! I almost didn't see that… oops :blush:
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Bluebellwriter7 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Quite alright. Thanks. :)
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FalconFate Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! :party:
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goninja Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Student General Artist
Powerful and moving.
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Bluebellwriter7 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks.
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Juandfr Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Well written, very poignant.
With the undying flower and the prince, this evokes a hint of beauty and the beast for me.
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Bluebellwriter7 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. I hadn't thought of Beauty and the Beast, actually. Good connection! :)
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GenkiPuck42 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014
(Are you, by any chance, a BBC Merlin fan?)
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Bluebellwriter7 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes, I am, actually. I haven't watched it since it went off, though.
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caatalexis Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014   General Artist
Very powerful. I really like this piece. I love how you subtlety stick in the idea of the little girl being the servant's daughter. It hadn't occurred to me until then. But thinking on it, the servant put the flower in a vase. The servant might have been acting upon the prince's orders...but then again, he/she might not have been. I like to think that the little girl might not have been the servant's daughter, but perhaps someone else's. She was orphaned and the servant took care of her - until she got taken away, that was. The flower is all that remains. Anyway, I really like it, and I like that the prince didn't save the girl. Because while I'm sad the little girl died, I feel that this was a better - and far more realistic - ending. The last line is heartbreaking, and everyone can, on a somewhat shallower level, connect with that, that feeling of regret. You realize too late you don't want her to burn; too late. Excellent work and congratulations on the DD.
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Bluebellwriter7 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. I'm glad that you were able to read so much into the piece. I don't know if she was actually the servant's daughter or not... that's up to you to decide.
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LindArtz Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014
Wonderful!!

The only thing I'd expected, which didn't happen, was a closing where the flower was described as dying, upon the demise of the child....for they seemed somehow intertwined. :heart:
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Bluebellwriter7 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. I kept the flower alive to remind the prince. Revenge, almost. ;)
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LindArtz Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014
Aw I see, clever! :) ^^
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caatalexis Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014   General Artist
They were intertwined in that the little girl created the flower, and symbolically other ways perhaps. But though I thought some time had passed, hardly any time passed between the little girl's capture and her burning, it seems. And when you look at the beginning paragraphs, it clearly states, "the flower doesn't ever die, not even years later." So though they seem rather connected, the flower will never die, despite it's creator's demise.
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LindArtz Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014
Good point! :) I need to think more before hitting 'reply'....also be awake more! :lol: :hug:
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